Thursday, 28 April 2011

1st Draft to the 2nd Draft storyboard

1st Draft

This here was my first drawft storyboard, it shows the opening onf the animation to be a microscope that comes to attention when the audience first sees it. That microscope jumps up and faces the camera and the camera trazels down the lens to see the blood on the glass plate at the bottom. I like the idea of this scene because it shows a clear understanding of the microscopic world inside the blood. it automatically shows where the animation is heading.
The second and third scene shows the attack of the HIV inside the blood. They start with the blood stream flowing and then introducing the HIV cell. I imagined having the introduction of the HIV cell as really dramatic, so I wanted the camera to flow close and over the cell. From here on the storyline lacks a lot, which is where a re-draft comes into play.

Between the 1st and 2nd draft

Between doing the 1st draft a while ago and doing the 2nd draft rather recently, there has been a lot of development that has helped improve my storyline.

I spent awhile thinking about how I could improve my act 2: HIV attacking the cell. What I wanted was a way that the HIV looked highly dramatic, deadly and not a boring A to B situation. Through the beginning of the Easter holidays, I took a little break and watched a couple of films. One of those films happened to be Independence day, normally this is one of my favourite films but this time I was captivated by the flight scene near the beginning and the end. I loeved the attack of alien against the human race, which instantly brought me back to my animation. Effectively the HIV virus is an alien attack on the Human race, so why not have a war simulation.

Unfortunatly I couldn't find the scene I wanted on Youtube but fortunatly the scene is in this trailer, so behold the beauty that is INDEPENDENCE DAY

Now I couldn't stop at this film, I had look further into the movement of planes, after looking into my memory and researching into youtube and my DVD collection I looked at some others.

Pearl Harbour





Star Wars

If anyone can think of any others that may help me then please comment, it will help me widen the range of my research.

What I learnt from these films and action films in general, is that camera movements and shots are key to the fast, dramatic look of the scenes. Some cameras show POV shots, forward shots, following shots, behind shots, zooming in and out shots. With a combination of these, I could make an awesome look to this act 2.

Extra research to visualise act 3

I came across this video created by Dr Rufus, and so far it is the best educational video on the subject I seen. It is clear and descriptive, and has a step by step visual process of HIV infection. If anyone is still stuck on visaulising the process, then give this a look.

2nd Draft

 As you can see from the 2nd Draft is that I basically kept the first act the same but act 2 and 3 have improved dramatically. In act two alone I have imported flight movements, formation and advanced zooms. Act 3 has been improved by Dr Rufus' video descriptions to how HIV attacks. I'm really impressed with the improvements to my storyline, I feel that the way I've got from A to B and the descriptions have made my piece unique.

What the frames show

Act 1

Frame 1: Open on a sad or lifeless looking microscope
Frame 2: Realise the audience
Frame 3: Jump up
Frame 4: Face the Camera
Frame 5: Travel down the lens, Fade out
Frame 6: Zoom to Blood sample

Act 2

Frame 1: Open on the blood flowing right to left
Frame 2: Camera moves into the flow
Frame 3: Incomes the HIV cell
Frame 4: HIV comes clearer into view
Frame 5: HIV front view in formation
Frame 6: HIV locates white blood cell - Heads up display in the style found in Ironman
Frame 7: White blood cell located
Frame 8: HIV roll out
Frame 9: Movement of HIV
Frame 10: Maneuver around red blood cells - HIV cells in the background as well
Frame 11: Focus on one HIV cell
Frame 12: Last maneuver over a red blood cell
Frame 13: HIV and White blood cell face to face
Frame 14: Show size comparison
Frame 15: Close to attachment

Act 3

Frame 1: White blood cell and HIV
Frame 2: Lower the HIV cell - show names of components
Frame 3: Landed/Attached
Frame 4: Transmembrane GP41 unfolds
Frame 5: Membrane fuse
Frame 6: Nucleocapsid enters the host cell
Frame 7 Nucleocapsid opens -show names of components
Frame 8: Release the RNA strands and enzymes
Frame 9: Reverse Transcriptase
Frame 10: RNA enters Polymerase turning in RNA-DNA
Frame 11: RNA-DNA enters Ribonuclease-H active site and breaks it down
Frame 12: RNA re-enters Polymerase and the DNA double-Helix is completed
Frame 13: DNA enters the nucleus
Frame 14: Viral DNA connects to the cells DNA
Frame 15: RNA has started to be copied
Frame 16: Viral RNA is copied and leaves the Nucleus
Frame 17: mRNA enters the Ribosomes. Proteins are created
Frame 18: Proteins enter the Viral Protease and produce smaller core Proteins
Frame 19: Two Viral RNA strands and the essential enzymes come together and are surrounded by Core Proteins to create a capsid
Frame 20: Capsid leaves the cell
Frame 21: Creating a Immature HIV cell
Frame 22: HIV cell matures
Frame 23: Process has repeated an more Immature HIV cells leave the damaged White blood cell
Frame 24: Overview of the activity in the blood stream, HIV being produced all over the place.


My Animatic has sown me how long each act will take, and I was always worried that the third act( the important one) wouldn't have enough time. Fortunatly the final act has the chance to have over 1 minute 20 second which is plenty of time to show the educational side of the Infection.


  1. Hey Chris - lots of thinking and doing on here - great. It just seems to me, however, that the microscope preface doesn't sit well with all that follows; especially now you're going for something much more cinematic in the following acts. I suggest you keep things nice and filmic throughout; certainly, zoom down the microscope to commence things, but I suggest you make the microscope feel like 'hardware' - shiny and imposing - like something 'cool' - and then take us down into the sample on the slide. It's more in keeping with everything else you've got going on.

    oh - and your unit 5 essay/time machine essay? DO NOT let these assignments slip, Chris - get your time machine proposal on here asap and email me your Unit 5 assignment so I can be reassured that all is well. Many thanks. And keep up the good work.

  2. Hey Phil, thanks for the comment, its reasuring that i'm on the right path. Ironically I ws expecting to get this feedback on the microscope because I too felt like it didn't fit with the rest. It's mainly because I had it as a first idea and liked it a lot, although I now need to change it to fit the rest of the story. I do have another idea that would fit more, which will be in my new post.

    Oh and with the unit 5 essay, I just need to sort the bibliography out and then it will be on it's way to you, and what I have so far on the TIME MACHINE essay will be posted later on today.